Re: Ahem…re. the Thought for the day… - Posted by Bill Gatten
Posted by Bill Gatten on April 16, 2000 at 14:32:55:
Nice thought. Bad rhyme scheme.
I’ve always felt that if one were deign to shift from iambic or trochaic pentameter (iambic in this case) to, say a dactylic hexameter, one might do well to remain with that mode (at lest for a full stanza); and THEN return in the final stanza to the metric theme of the first stanza. Do you agree?
And, hey!! What’s up with rhyming “mistakes” with “mistakes”? That’s kinduv an easy stretch for a pro, isn’t it?
No offense to Ms. Kroegar (I know she means well), but wouldn’t…say…an anapestic heptametic approach perhaps be the more logical deviation for the sonatic medium? Wouldn’t even more brevity serve as well to motivate and encourage, more so than…well…not brevity?
Example…here’s a short poem about fleas that I wrote in anapestic monometer. What else could one say?
By Billy John Gatten age 59 1/2
See…no need to get fancy.
Another in reverse anpestec independent double foot (an even briefer one):
"ENCOURAGEMENT OF THE LONG DISTANCE RUNNER"
By Billy Gatten Age 59 3/4
Then, for an even shorter one, there’s always the old favorite:
"ENCOURAGEMENT OF THE LONG DISTANCE ‘FEMALE’ RUNNER"
by Bill Gatten Age 59 7/8
(Guiness Book of Fine Beers lists it as the shortest complete poem in the world…or something)
These all just barely beat out:
“PENGUIN PONDERINGS” (author unknown)