Posted by Bill Gatten on April 20, 2000 at 12:48:34:
Ed,
Your last line works real good in Macon County Georgia where “goin” is proncounced “goane” (as rhyming with bone).
Bill
Here’s one to laminate:
When creditors try to tree ya
Call Mr. Garcia
He’ll never charge a fee ya
Can’t afford
He’ll get you the money,
Rain, sleet or sunny
And tell you a funny
And…um…(whack ya with a board? Show you his sword? …I dunno.)
Bill Gatten
Thought for the day… - Posted by Ed Garcia
Posted by Ed Garcia on April 16, 2000 at 10:32:33:
Thought for the day???
TODAY AND TOMORROW
I’ve shut the doors on yesterday
Its sorrows and mistakes.
I’ve locked within its gloomy walls
Past failures and mistakes.
I only take with me
Wisdom form pain distilled
And from each step
Each perfect step
As heavenward I build.
No thought shall enter this abode
That has a hint of pain.
And envy, malice, and distrust
Shall never entrance gain.
I’ve shut the doors on yesterday
And thrown the key away.
Tomorrow holds no fears for me
Since I have found today.
By Iva Lucille Kroegar
Re: Thought for the day… - Posted by Jim Fox (age 59 3/4)
Posted by Jim Fox (age 59 3/4) on April 16, 2000 at 19:56:40:
Great little poem. Copied it and e-mailed it to a friend. She will like it too. I always enjoy your “thought for the day” posts. Keep up the good work!!
Re: Ahem…re. the Thought for the day… - Posted by Bill Gatten
Posted by Bill Gatten on April 16, 2000 at 14:32:55:
Ed,
Nice thought. Bad rhyme scheme.
I’ve always felt that if one were deign to shift from iambic or trochaic pentameter (iambic in this case) to, say a dactylic hexameter, one might do well to remain with that mode (at lest for a full stanza); and THEN return in the final stanza to the metric theme of the first stanza. Do you agree?
And, hey!! What’s up with rhyming “mistakes” with “mistakes”? That’s kinduv an easy stretch for a pro, isn’t it?
No offense to Ms. Kroegar (I know she means well), but wouldn’t…say…an anapestic heptametic approach perhaps be the more logical deviation for the sonatic medium? Wouldn’t even more brevity serve as well to motivate and encourage, more so than…well…not brevity?
Example…here’s a short poem about fleas that I wrote in anapestic monometer. What else could one say?
FLEAS
By Billy John Gatten age 59 1/2
Adam
Had 'em
See…no need to get fancy.
Bill
Another in reverse anpestec independent double foot (an even briefer one):
“ENCOURAGEMENT OF THE LONG DISTANCE RUNNER”
By Billy Gatten Age 59 3/4
Go
Joe!
Then, for an even shorter one, there’s always the old favorite:
“ENCOURAGEMENT OF THE LONG DISTANCE ‘FEMALE’ RUNNER”
by Bill Gatten Age 59 7/8
(Guiness Book of Fine Beers lists it as the shortest complete poem in the world…or something)
Go
Jo!
These all just barely beat out:
“PENGUIN PONDERINGS” (author unknown)
Why
Fly?
Welcome back Bill… My dictionary was getting dusty! (nt) - Posted by Brandi_TX
Posted by Brandi_TX on April 16, 2000 at 22:50:13:
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Re: Try this Bill… - Posted by Ed Garcia
Posted by Ed Garcia on April 16, 2000 at 15:40:58:
Boy Bill, you’re tuff.
I guss you just taught me a lesson. I can’t just throw anything up on the board.
I never realized you were such a critic.
Sometimes when I do a thought for the day I just go to my archives and pull
Something. Now I’ll have to be a little more careful.
I just like to share food for thought with others. I like pick me ups, words of
Wisdom, and awareness phrases that give us something to think about.
Here, let me give you an example:
To go to Bill Gattens seminars a must.
He’ll teach you about a PacTrust.
Real-estates his game
He’ll teach you the same
For Nubie’s as well as us.
By Ed Garcia
LOL
Where’s the BEAT! - Posted by allen
Posted by allen on April 21, 2000 at 09:56:45:
Ahem…
We’ll make rappers out of all of you YET!
Just teasing…
Allen
Re: Try this Bill… - Posted by Bill Gatten
Posted by Bill Gatten on April 16, 2000 at 17:23:22:
Now you got some real serious rhyme scheme and meter goin’ for ya!
Bill
Or This… - Posted by JPiper
Posted by JPiper on April 16, 2000 at 16:02:24:
Give Garcia a call on the phone
He might just give you a loan
Don?t sit and sigh
All it takes is to try
Could be the step to get goin?